http://disqus.com/by/shjh2525/enFri, 18 Sep 2009 11:22:31 -0000http://maximandblue.tumblr.com/post/178992446#comment-16876105<p>max....max, max, max. apart from your stupendous attempt at over permeating every sentance with another adjective, there are some basic grammer issues that I think we should cover to enhance not only the ease of reading this paragraph but also to make the writing more attractive and flowing.<br><br>Firstly: 'receptionists' should be receptionist's as the acrylic nails belong to her. Secondly: The first sentance does little to stir an emotive response from me so lets play around with it to make it a little better. 'The sounds of the office reflect the unhappy lives of the unmotivated, number crunching drones that work there; the whirr of the photocopy machine, the monotonous tapping of the receptionist's acrylic nails and the low hum of the air conditioning unit all linger in the stale office air.' I think that sounds quite a bit better...<br><br>I could continue but for the sake of your temper, i shall desist. let this be a lesson so that i never have to pull you up on your writing again. I only do this because someone who chooses to have a blog should at least be able to express themselves in an according manner to the english language.<br><br>good day</p>shjh2525Fri, 18 Sep 2009 11:22:31 -0000