You did a great job on this. I'm hoping you show how to upload, edit and get it to the web (hint,hint). Not very many people do this type of gesture without expecting something. Thanks again!
I have tried several versions of long copy, written by the "top" copywriters on the net, to never see my conversions go up.
I would never say long copy doesn't work, but it depends on the market in my opinion.
And on the web, people don't have (or take) the time to read a 19 page sales letter. I can vouch for this with my site.
The novelty of grabbing a cup of coffee and spending hours on the web are over. People get to a web page and want to know what you offer and how it will help them, as quickly as possible and with no hype.